【導讀】J同學把目光瞄準了芝加哥大學,憑借著多年的成功實踐,PO幫助他充分發(fā)揮活動特長和論文撰寫,借此邁向他夢想中的學府。我們做的不是照本宣科,而是針對他申請的芝加哥大學的要求來進行有針對性的策略。其中一項便是針對芝加哥大學那讓人聞風喪膽的補充論文來做專門的訓練。
學生背景:
Name:J同學
School: International School 學校:國際學校
Accepted School: University of Chicago 錄取學校:芝加哥大學
GPA: 3.86/4.0
AP Courses: AP European History, AP Chemistry, AP Computer Science, AP Calculus AB, AP Biology (4), AP English Language & Composition (5), AP Psychology (5), AP US History (5), AP Chinese Language & Culture (5)
AP課程:歐洲史,化學,計算機科學,微積分AB,生物(4),英語及寫作(5),心理學(5),美國史(5),中國語言及文化(5)
IB Courses: IB French Abinitio
ID課程:IB French Abinitio
TOEFL: N/A
SAT: 2180
SAT II SAT:
US History 750 美國歷史:750
Biology Ecological 730 生物生態(tài):730
Math 2C 750 數(shù)學2C:750
Chemistry 720 化學:720
Chinese Language with Listening 800 中國語言聽力:800
Activities:活動
1) Community Service Club President
社區(qū)服務俱樂部主席
2) Science classes and exposition founder & organizer – designed and conducted science experiments with migrant school students. Science experiments and curriculum with migrant school students. Organized science expo.
科學類和博覽會創(chuàng)始人兼組織者——與民工子弟學校學生設計并進行科學實驗。與民工子弟學校的學生進行科學實驗和課程。組織科學博覽會。
3) Chess club public relations officer
國際象棋俱樂部主管
4) Shanghai Go association certified referee
上海GO協(xié)會認證裁判
5) Link crew leader – SAS freshman transition program; pioneered this effort
Link crew領袖-SAS新生過渡計劃;這一項目的開創(chuàng)者
6) Writing center tutor
寫作中心助教
7) Jacaranda trip
蘭花楹旅行
8) School wide event coordinator – organized Thanksgiving dinner for all school clubs and migrant children
學校大事件協(xié)調(diào)員——為所有學校俱樂部和農(nóng)民工子弟組織感恩節(jié)晚餐
9) Community service blog author
社區(qū)服務博客作者
10) University Pennsylvania Summer College
賓大暑期班
導師點評:
The first time we met J he was very quiet and reserved, but after several conversations we discovered that he was a thoughtful student who had an insightful perspective on himself and the world around him. J signed a Platinum package with us during the 1st semester of his Junior year. He was an average test-taker, and was unable to break 2180 on the SAT, so Prestige Only helped J highlight other aspects of his application.
初見J同學時,給人的印象時有些內(nèi)向保守的,接觸幾次下來,我們發(fā)現(xiàn)他很有自己的思想,對周圍的事物有獨到的見解。11年級第一學期初作為我們白金會員的J同學的學期成績在中游,并且SAT成績始終無法突破2180分,鑒于這種情況,PO為他量身定制了更適合他本人的申請。
J set his sights firmly on the University of Chicago, so Prestige Only coached him through activity development and essay drafting by drawing from our proven track record of acceptances to his dream school. Though we will never develop the same activities and copy the same essays from our past students, we shared our strategies with J in order to mold his profile to fit UChicago. One aspect that we focused on was the notoriously difficult supplemental essay for which UChicago is famous for.
J同學把目光瞄準了芝加哥大學,憑借著多年的成功實踐,PO幫助他充分發(fā)揮活動特長和論文撰寫,借此邁向他夢想中的學府。我們做的不是照本宣科,而是針對他申請的芝加哥大學的要求來進行有針對性的策略。其中一項便是針對芝加哥大學那讓人聞風喪膽的補充論文來做專門的訓練。
Prestige Only gave J direction by emphasizing a more intellectual and pensive writing style, which from our experiences his dream school looked very favorably upon. We encouraged him to emphasize his thought process and ideas, and his ability to connect complex themes such as humanity, nature, languages, and service. J's Personal Statement came out of his experiences working with migrant school students; he described service as a universal language that could improve himself and his community. In his UChicago supplement, which is always difficult to approach, J accentuated different aspects of his service mindset. Throughout the process, J really opened up and shared his thoughts, feelings, motivations, desires, and fears and it was truly a privilege working with this fine young man.
PO為此對J同學在如何更聰明有效的寫作方面進行了強化培訓。因為我們知道這是他夢想的芝加哥大學向來注重的。我們鼓勵他擴展思維,從而養(yǎng)成能將人類,自然,語言和服務等問題串聯(lián)起來的能力。在他的個人陳述中,J同學借鑒了他在打工子弟學校與同學共同學習的經(jīng)驗,并說明了在混校的的學習過程中給自己帶來的溝通方面的提升,這些在芝加哥大學的補充論文要求中都是極難闡述的,J同學突出闡述了他服務中的不同思維模式。在一系列的訓練后,J同學漸漸擴展了他的思維并懂得了分享他的思想,感情,動力,渴望甚至是畏懼,這一切改變也讓我們覺得與J同學共事真是三生有幸啊。
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